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Monday, August 16, 2010

Poem: Give A Thing

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Give A Thing

Trust is a curious thing
You toss it forward
and it bounces back
in surprising trajectory,
knocking you backward
down a basement stair

You grab for the banister
Rearranging your outfit
you climb back up with
shaky steps, considering
the ways you may shorten
your skirt and disappear

© 2010 Annie King 8-17-10

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9 comments:

  1. I like the "surprise" element thanks Annie. Made me consider the notion of "trust". How sometimes people trust you right off. You can tell but you can't figure out why... it is really a good feeling. How sometimes people don't trust you from the beginning. You can tell but you can't figure out why. It is really an uncomfortable feeling. Is it some sort of chemistry that starts it, then later experience that tempers it? Guess you gotta' keep a grip on the banister because you may never fully understand it.

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  2. Hi Annie,

    I like how your poetry makes me go away and think about it. As you're aware, I don't know very much about poetry, but I'm feeling rewarded by reading yours. Thank you. :D

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  3. sweet ending.

    ok, i followed you here and changed my link at my blog.

    keep writing!

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  4. Hi Everyone,
    Thank you for your comments! I worked with this poem late last night. It changed quite a bit from its beginning, and took on a slightly different life of its own, in an effort to express an emotional response. The final line has gone in two directions: the way you see it written, and this: "considering the ways you may shorten your skirt and reappear"

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  5. this is quite fitting for what's on my mind lately. i like it.

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  6. Very thought provoking, especially the twist at the end. I like it, but it's sad at the same time, realistic.

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  7. Hi Leonie,

    Thanks for your comments! As soon as I wrote the poem, in its final revision, I felt a little differently about the whole situation. I think whenever we respond emotionally to something, it changes us just a bit. I probably should change that final word to "reappear." The event was not sad, just a surprising turn, it took some time to process. I often say, poems capture moments. So, if this changes anything, here's my current take:

    Give A Thing

    Trust is a curious thing
    You toss it forward
    and it bounces back
    in surprising trajectory,
    knocking you backward
    down a basement stair

    You grab for the banister
    Rearranging your outfit
    you climb back up with
    shaky steps, considering
    the ways you may shorten
    your skirt and reappear

    © 2010 Annie King 8-17-10

    I always believe in trust! Trust can go wrong, but in this instance, my instincts are correct, I'm sure, and I'm glad I took that step.

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  8. In this instance, trust went wrong, and it stayed wrong; but I still believe in trust (unless someone has proved themselves to be untrustworthy).

    I read a quote earlier today, that went something like, With some people, if you give them a second chance (or let's say the benefit of the doubt), it's like giving them time to reload, after they missed you the first time. Sometimes trust can be stupid, and it's wise to be wary.

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